Date: 2005-10-08 10:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aerynstales.livejournal.com
Very nice! I liked the dialogue and the summary! :D

However, one little crit? I had a hard time figuring out at first who was talking in the dialogue. Was it Petunia or James...

Is there perhaps a way to make this clearer...just at the start? Just as a launchpad?

Anyhoo, I did really like this. Kudos, gal!
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